#ooc

the muse, she hit hard

i have written TWO stories in the past week

I am envious! I keep stalling

and AFK, must walk dog

and back

It was a short walk

wb!

I forgot to do it earlier. I get distracted/tense when my parents play the 'maybe we'll show up out of the blue, maybe we won't' game

and today they did not show

oof

i feel bad. I know when my folks mention visiting, I probably can't hide the cringe in my voice. I love em, but Dad has been extra judgey lately and I'm not sure I can stay civil if he gives me shit

fair

family can be hard

Old wounds and weak spots. Yeah. Ooh well. Glad you are writing, More Black Widow?

Steve!

YAY!

You want it? I rushed (I always rush) and posted the first draft of the first chapter, which is always folly

but I have the whole thing on google docs

I could peek. Got a bit of time

I liked it. only have one suggestion

but I don't want to discourage you

So, I know it has flaws, and I appreciate outside perspective

"I like it, but stuff could be better" isn't discouraging

"This sucks and why did you share this" is discouraging

Well, it's a minor thing I suppose, but when Steve is mentally cursing.. he goes 'Fuck. Fuck. Fuck.' and uses 'fuckin' ' in another scene. While that word is almost common now, and was not unknown in Steve's day, it was a LOT Harsher and strikes me as less likely his default. Damn Damn Damn! or even SHIT SHIT SHIT! would i think fit the character better.

Hm.

I think he IS in a situation that merits a few f-bombs

but I might want to be more judicious with them.

It might but I don't think it his subconscious go to, if that makes sense. LOADS of pain, he'd go to a default that takes less thought. But that's just my view as a unlicensed Capologist! 🙂

I thought you captured his grief over Bucky at that time really well!

"Shit" is my go-to

I think Shit would be better but I am, to be fair, being nitpicky. Others may disagree

Tanya also commented on the F-bombs

But do avoid "Blue Blazes" "Great Caesar's Ghost!" or "Oh my stars and garters!" (You have to be Beast of the X-men to pull that last one off)

ha!

Glad you are on a roll 🙂

hihi

how goes the war?

Yes. How goes?

The war continues. This is a siege. DAILY combing; I'm going to teach him to do it.

Took him to an away football game so he could see friends perform at halftime and we got ice cream.

Ice cream, the taste of hope defying the blands of despair!

ice cream!

Cold Stone!

HOLY CRAP I DID MATH

Bed now......

Sleep well, Shady Hugs